Peer Edits

Response to Ribka's Article

Very good wording and excellent transitions between paragraphs. One suggestion I have for you is to include a paragraph that's unique and different from any other article you would read about Twilight. Try not to portray your article as a book review, and more so of an article about the book, but not the plot. What I mean by this is I would include a paragraph or two about the history of the author, and interesting facts about how the idea for the book started, etc. Really focus on making the article intriging to all audiences, not just Twilight fans. I wouldn't go any further in depth about the plot of the story. Otherwise, very good idea for an article!



Response to Carly's Article

Great idea for a feature story! I would suggest that you organize your article more (use paraprahs that contain one common idea versus one large paraprah). You have very good thoughts and sentences, just work on portraying them in a more organized structure. Also, you need an intruduction or at leat a couple of introductuary sentences, along with a conclusion. You have a great story, just work on adding little touches such as a unique introduction. A good introduction could really do a lot for your story.